Comments on Steve's "After the Disaster"

[rvm45]

Great story so far Steve--

This is one that I hadn't gotten around to reading, for some obscure reason.

Read the first two pages--do more later.

That's another thing that I like about most of your stories.

In addition to the fact that the stories generally explore new ground, and are very tightly plotted.....

But you also tend to make them good and long--thus prolonging the pleasure.

Hope most folks will comment here, instead of between installments.....

......RVM45

[mnn2300]

Actually I'd prefer it on the same thread as the story

[rvm45]

It ain't anything that inspires me to fits of Red-Face Bellowing.

Let's let Admin decide.....

No hard feelings either way.

.....RVM45

[robb1313]

Moved from the story -- I hadn't seen the comments thread.

A very well written story -- able to capture my attention --

Keep it coming!

[admin]

My thought is I really would prefer it on the same thread as the story, that way you keep the comments and the story together and the author doesn't have to hunt around to see what people are thinking about their story, I really don't believe it interupts the flow of the story myself -- but I'm not going to lose any sleep over it.

[steve]

Hi, and thanks to everyone who has written their opinions about my story, "After The Disaster," so far.

If I could interject my own opinion about where comments should be made, I'd prefer that they be made in this "Comments" thread. In that way, it keeps the story together and people not having to read through comments to get to the next segments.

As I wrote at the very beginning of the "After The Disaster" thread, the story is already complete and is simply being ported over a portion at a time. Feel free to read it in it's entirety beforehand at the link mentioned in that thread. My recommendation is to read it as it was intended - One part at a time. Thank you.

Useless Trivia - The story was originally written in 2005.

[robb1313]

I love the way the plot is going --

Since it's written in 2005, that means you have not only refined your writing skills, but written many more stories to publish here, correct?

Rob

[ding]

I read it at the link...it seems the end where they go to the island leaves it open for a sequel...have you written one?

[rvm45]

Well Steve, I've gotten to section LV(55?).

There's something I've noted about you're stories: Your characters often get stuck in a Holding Pattern or Bee-Dance, covering the same piece of real estate over and over.....

But the tight plotting keeps it from seeming Tedious and Repetitious.

Your work definitely has a "Different" quality to it, that makes it Refreshing.

.....RVM45

[steve]

I always write my stories with sequel potential - After all, real life never ends so why should stories?

I have not written a sequel but I do have some notes for a possible sequel. However, part of the fun of writing a serial story is challenging yourself both artistically and thematically; Seeing if you can paint yourself out of the corner you purposely painted yourself into.

*SPOILERS START*

Just to give one example of how a storyline changes during the course of writing it - If I remember correctly, at one point, I was going to have the "female crazy" that Jojo runs into at the apartment building become a major character and Jojo was going to "mature" over the course of the story to take care of her. Also, at one point, Cindy was going to die in the pond when she drives her car into it.

*SPOILERS END*

Sept 14, 2011 18:42:36 GMT -6 ding said:

I read it at the link...it seems the end where they go to the island leaves it open for a sequel...have you written one?

[steve]

What's the old saying, "Anyone can see your mannerisms but yourself?" I'm sure that I have some writing conventions that are obvious to others but not myself. With every story that I write, I'm always trying to go beyond my "comfort zone" and attempt new styles that I'm neither comfortable or familiar with. It's a never-ending learning process.

Sept 15, 2011 11:14:05 GMT -6 rvm45 said:

Well Steve, I've gotten to section LV(55?).

There's something I've noted about you're stories: Your characters often get stuck in a Holding Pattern or Bee-Dance, covering the same piece of real estate over and over.....

But the tight plotting keeps it from seeming Tedious and Repetitious.

Your work definitely has a "Different" quality to it, that makes it Refreshing.

.....RVM45

[nancy1340]

I don't care for seperate comment threads but you know what? This aint's my rodeo and I really appreciate the work he's putting into the story so I'll try to go by his wishes.

[shirley]

Steve I finished the story you have posted on here as of this morning 9-23-11 and am really enjoying it so far. It is very different from what I have been reading on other forums which makes it refreshing. I look forward to finishing the story. I am curious whether the foursome will stop being scavengers and make a real survival future for themselves. There are still viable seeds and gardening supplies and long term storage and what not still available. So far you have not mentioned animals. No dogs? No cats? What about farm animals? Look forward to finding the answers. Shirley

[kaijafon]

great story, I do hope you write more......

[steve]

Hi Shirley and thank you for your kind comments. The story "After the Disaster" has been posted in it's entirety here on this board and no further material (with the exception of some notes for a possible sequel) has been written for it. Therefore, you'll be able to discover the answers to those questions at your own pace.

Sept 23, 2011 9:07:50 GMT -6 shirley said:

Steve I finished the story you have posted on here as of this morning 9-23-11 and am really enjoying it so far. It is very different from what I have been reading on other forums which makes it refreshing. I look forward to finishing the story. I am curious whether the foursome will stop being scavengers and make a real survival future for themselves. There are still viable seeds and gardening supplies and long term storage and what not still available. So far you have not mentioned animals. No dogs? No cats? What about farm animals? Look forward to finding the answers. Shirley

[leper]

Fantastic. I loved the story. I wondered about animals and such, but I put it off. It was a fresh look, from the other side. I was surprised with the twist. Genuinely surprised. Thank you very much.

[hickory7]

This was a fabulous story. I agree that your writing is very different. Same acreage, but really incredible character development. I have read "Trapped in Paradise" and "After the Disaster" now. They both kept me on the edge of my seat. Thank You.