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Post by texican on Oct 25, 2021 1:00:57 GMT -6
ncsfsgm,
Late night or is it very early morning chapters.
Thank you.
Texican....
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Post by ncsfsgm on Oct 25, 2021 5:33:41 GMT -6
Cal stepped out the porch and pressed the garage door remote. He pulled out his keys pressed the remote starter for the K5 before the garage door finished opening. Quickly stepping back inside, he went back to the kitchen, opening up his parka, and picked up the thermal mug to take a sip……
Cal had difficulty opening his eyes. He attempted to sit up but his body didn't respond. He really felt nothing but lightness. Slowly, one eye opened slightly and he saw three blurry images. He sighed as the images blurred to darkness.
"Call it 0430 hours." The doctor said, pulling the surgical gloves off.
Andy slung his carbine over his shoulder and slowly walked away from the combat support hospital. Stopping in front of a sandbagged building, he pulled out his canteen and took a long drink of water before entering.
"Sir, Master Sergeant Coleman didn't make it."
The Colonel laid down his pen and rubbed his face with both hands.
"Just as well I guess. Damn a woman who sends a 'Dear John' letter to a combat zone."
THE END
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Post by bluefox2 on Oct 25, 2021 6:00:05 GMT -6
OH HECK NO. This didn't just end like this. That is mean sir. MEAN I TELL YOU. But a darn good story.
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Post by iamnobody on Oct 25, 2021 7:02:34 GMT -6
I never saw that ending coming.
Those "Dear John" letters stink. Even if your name is not John, guys still get them.
Thanks for these wonderful stories.
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Post by gipsy on Oct 25, 2021 11:13:31 GMT -6
I am sure going to miss Cal
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Post by boomerweps on Oct 25, 2021 12:19:41 GMT -6
Well, that sucks. I really liked this story. Sad you decided to just kill it.
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Post by cavsgt on Oct 25, 2021 13:26:15 GMT -6
Really super first class story but don't much care for the ending. On a different note kind of Alfred Hitchcoky ending.
Thank You for all of the hours of fantastic entertainment.
Phill
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Post by texican on Oct 25, 2021 15:00:00 GMT -6
"Sir, Master Sergeant Coleman didn't make it."
The Colonel laid down his pen and rubbed his face with both hands.
"Just as well I guess. Damn a woman who sends a 'Dear John' letter to a combat zone."
THE ENDncsfsgm, Well that sucks, unless you are pulling a massive sharp twist to the story and this was when Cal was in a previous military enlistment and he pulled thru even after being declared dead. Has happened in real life.
Andy slung his carbine over his shoulder and slowly walked away from the combat support hospital. Stopping in front of a sandbagged building, he pulled out his canteen and took a long drink of water before entering.
What is it with the sand bagged building which did not exist at the ranch? ncsfsgm, are you one of those that likes to mess (screw) with the minds and well being of others? Maybe so, maybe not, but probably so. Life will probably continue for all of us that have enjoyed the story up to the last chapter, but hopefully no heart attacks by your readers, but the feeling of loss will haunt some. Are we sensing a Book 2? Texican.... ps: Ok readers, remember ncsfsgm is a sly passionate gifted writer and will tweak your emotions as he has done thru all of the story.
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Post by paulk on Oct 25, 2021 15:14:05 GMT -6
I am not happy! This really hurts.
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Post by torgilsfoulbeard on Oct 25, 2021 15:28:10 GMT -6
Wow A good author connects with readers on an emotional level. A really good one drops the floor out from under you. This one flies high and beyond that. A lot of technical details of writing and conventions of literature were missed as there's a lack of experience but good grief raw talent coupled with a lifetime of experience in the real world make up for a few missed literary conventions. This retired NCO has a great future ahead of him. I'll read with his army any time. Regards and complements Sargent From Torgils Foul Beard Tucked in on the High Ground Between The Cannon and the Zumbro Thanks for a really Fun read
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Post by iamnobody on Oct 25, 2021 16:06:02 GMT -6
"Sir, Master Sergeant Coleman didn't make it."
The Colonel laid down his pen and rubbed his face with both hands.
"Just as well I guess. Damn a woman who sends a 'Dear John' letter to a combat zone."
THE ENDncsfsgm, Well that sucks, unless you are pulling a massive sharp twist to the story and this was when Cal was in a previous military enlistment and he pulled thru even after being declared dead. Has happened in real life.
Andy slung his carbine over his shoulder and slowly walked away from the combat support hospital. Stopping in front of a sandbagged building, he pulled out his canteen and took a long drink of water before entering.
What is it with the sand bagged building which did not exist at the ranch? ncsfsgm, are you one of those that likes to mess (screw) with the minds and well being of others? Maybe so, maybe not, but probably so. Life will probably continue for all of us that have enjoyed the story up to the last chapter, but hopefully no heart attacks by your readers, but the feeling of loss will haunt some. Are we sensing a Book 2? Texican.... ps: Ok readers, remember ncsfsgm is a sly passionate gifted writer and will tweak your emotions as he has done thru all of the story. Remember back to Book 1 page 1 Cal got the Dear John letter and went berserk on attacking the enemy The rest of Book 1, 2, 3 and 4 is his dream while in reality he was badly wounded in attacking the enemy and died at the field hospital
Dear John letters are the ultimate nasty.
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Post by shade on Oct 25, 2021 16:19:52 GMT -6
in the story's beganing Cal survived the ambush and told the General he was done. next stop was at JOm's in Tennesse. so where did this night mare occur? Shade
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Post by biggkidd on Oct 25, 2021 20:30:42 GMT -6
Great story !
Ending SUCKED!!!!!!!!!!
Thank you sir for posting this tale, much enjoyed...
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Post by udwe on Oct 25, 2021 21:09:12 GMT -6
Boo! Don't like this ending at all.
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Post by papaof2 on Oct 25, 2021 21:24:41 GMT -6
Some people say that your entire life flashes before you when you think you're about to die.
Why not your entire life as it might have been or your entire life as you wish it could be?
Perhaps not the ending we were expecting, but the author failed to tell us he was kin to Rod Serling...
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Post by remembergoliad on Oct 25, 2021 21:58:10 GMT -6
A clue was in front of us all along. The title. "Falling UP"....
Unexpected and abrupt, but then some things in life are just that way.
Thanks for the story!
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Post by dannab1 on Oct 26, 2021 11:09:55 GMT -6
Wow, I ran face first into that surprise ending brick wall. What a twist!
Really enjoyed your story. Please keep writing, I am really enjoying your new one!
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Post by bluefox2 on Oct 27, 2021 20:51:09 GMT -6
Just another thought sir. You are a seriously good writer. sucked us right into a good story and slapped us with a Hitchcock type twisted ending. Please keep up the good work.
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Post by 2t2crash on Nov 1, 2021 22:29:48 GMT -6
Jaw. Dropped.
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Post by feralferret on Jun 7, 2023 1:23:54 GMT -6
Nothing like crashing into a concrete wall at 120 mph. Excellent story, but the ending was more than a little abrupt. I went splat. That made "Who Shot JR?" look like an amateur attempt.
Ncsfsgm, thank you for this fine series of stories.
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